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Monday, May 10, 2010

Revision of the poem

Here's an earlier version of the poem. I can't seem to decide which I like better. Anyone have an opinion?

Pollen blows. Towhees sing.
A hawk's driven off the branch
By a mourning dove
Calling.

1 comment:

  1. A recent teacher encourage me to create poems and songs that had only 10 syllables. Here is my first one:

    Time in the forest
    Alone
    I miss you.

    Try it!

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